Did anything stand out to you as working well, or not working at all? I haven't done a lot with themes/motifs so let me know if the symbolism is working/not working or apparent/not apparent. (One of them is probably too obscure to notice) Did the ending make sense? Did it work well? Any other comments/suggestions are also, always, welcome. Thanks for reading. **Revised/updated** I changed the name of the story, added in more exposition. [Formerly "Legacy"] This story is the precursor to a rather bloody civil war. The main narrative takes place a generation and 1/2 later, which I will be attempting to get published (traditionally) or at the very least starting a collection of rejection letters, so it won't be on here (This misspelling of Colonel hopefully makes more sense in the larger context of the ranks: Vikar, Vicaptain, Captain, Vicornel, Coronel, etc. etc.) View the full article